So I know this is random, but I'm posting here because the I know iMore Community is awesome.
Anyways,
We're making a short film at school, and our group came up with the idea below. What I'm looking for is any ideas and suggestions regarding our idea, to help smooth out the story line. The main thing I don't like about the story is "Why is the boy after the new girl?" I would love to hear your ideas. A title for the film would be good to, and names for the characters.
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Thanks for your help,
Aiden
Anyways,
We're making a short film at school, and our group came up with the idea below. What I'm looking for is any ideas and suggestions regarding our idea, to help smooth out the story line. The main thing I don't like about the story is "Why is the boy after the new girl?" I would love to hear your ideas. A title for the film would be good to, and names for the characters.
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Short Film Idea
Intro ? Present
New girl comes to school, has a ?buddy? to help her out and settles in good.
After she settles in, she gets told a story of something terrible that happen a few years ago?
Flashback - Past
Boy was going home from school, but being chased/teased by group of bullies. One push the boy over the boy (accidental), but he trips and falls, head lands on a rock [or similar]. Bullies look scared; don?t know if boy is dead, so they run away. Boy mouths ?help?. (Boy never seen again, no one knows if dead or vanished)
[Then in the shadows, shows someone else turning and running away: (shot of feet only) ? actually new girl]
Cut Back to School - Present
After she hears the story, new girl realises something wrong, starts becoming paranoid, guilty (possibly for not helping, but running away). Starts seeing ?blood prints? in places. [Blood prints could spell out words, ?WHY,? ?HELP?](i.e. in her locker, test paper, toilet door.) Gets more agitated. Finally she breaks, and tries to run out of school. Runs though back of school, trying to get out. Turns the corner and her name is spelt out in blood on the wall in front of her. Hears two steps. Turns around. Boy is there. Girl screams. Cut to black. End film.
-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------Intro ? Present
New girl comes to school, has a ?buddy? to help her out and settles in good.
After she settles in, she gets told a story of something terrible that happen a few years ago?
Flashback - Past
Boy was going home from school, but being chased/teased by group of bullies. One push the boy over the boy (accidental), but he trips and falls, head lands on a rock [or similar]. Bullies look scared; don?t know if boy is dead, so they run away. Boy mouths ?help?. (Boy never seen again, no one knows if dead or vanished)
[Then in the shadows, shows someone else turning and running away: (shot of feet only) ? actually new girl]
Cut Back to School - Present
After she hears the story, new girl realises something wrong, starts becoming paranoid, guilty (possibly for not helping, but running away). Starts seeing ?blood prints? in places. [Blood prints could spell out words, ?WHY,? ?HELP?](i.e. in her locker, test paper, toilet door.) Gets more agitated. Finally she breaks, and tries to run out of school. Runs though back of school, trying to get out. Turns the corner and her name is spelt out in blood on the wall in front of her. Hears two steps. Turns around. Boy is there. Girl screams. Cut to black. End film.
Thanks for your help,
Aiden